This is my first attempt in trying to write a erotic story. What I want is a emotional, sensational, yet erotic ( i hope) story about sex (what else?), not that kind of 'oh-fuck-me-hard-bastard' kind of story. It is just the first few paragraph, not much 'action' yet...
Sylvia smiled as I held her hand and led her to my bedroom. There, I pulled her close to be and look into her sky-blue eyes, hugging her so closely I can feel her breast touching mine through the T-shirt.
“ Nobody’s home, my parent had gone oversea and will not be back for another week.” I whispered into her ears, licking her ear lobe with my tongue after that.
“ So?” She replied, her eyes full of mischief while she place both her hands around my waist.
“ You know very well what we’re going to do.” I kissed her lips passionately, trusting my tongue inside her mouth and tasting her sweetness. I could feel passion inside her and she too lick my tongue with hers.
Sylvia and I had been together for about four years, since we were in Secondary Three. Both of us are now currently studying in the same JC. While both of us really do love each other, weÂ’ve an unspoken understanding that both of us yearn for each otherÂ’s body. In short, we are virgins trying to loose our innocence to each other. And there is no better time than now to satisfy that lust in us.
“ Let’s make it very slow, I want our first time to be memorable and exciting. Make it very very slow, will you?” Sylvia asks.
“ I’ve an idea!” Pulling myself off her, I went over to a drawer and took out a brand-new digital video recorder, capable of recording up to four hours long. Placing the recorder on a tripod beside my bed, I said, “now this would make it more memorable and exciting, don’t you agree?”
Sylvia smiled at me again as I wrap my arms around her slender waist and resume our passionate kissing. Her silky long hair brushes against my cheek and I could feel her body heat radiating off her. Our breathing was beginning to get shallower and faster. As I gaze into her sky-blue eyes, I sink deeper into passion. Already, I could feel my penis erecting beneath my jeans.
Slowly, my kiss travels from her chin to her neck and up again to her forehead. She kept her eyes close while allowing my lips to touch her fair skin, hugging me closer to her. The smell coming from her is so nice, so indescribable. SheÂ’s just so beautiful.
“ Allow me to be part of you” I moved my palms upwards to the underneath of her armpits, beside her breast, “ allow me to feel you”.
Please, I really need you to comment on it. Only serious comment please, I'm being very serious here.