Hi guys
Planning to write a novel based on love and how money makes the world go round
I have written the draft, hope you could give advice.
The main character is me and it is an idyllic day to day teenager's life in singapore

Love, unrequitedRays of brilliant warm sunshine filtered into the almost junkyard garage that i called my own proudly.Grinning cheekily, i could only envisage what calamity could ensue when i turned on the towering amplifiers .
Since i had no luck with girls, bah"Girls were only money sucking creatures that like Jay chou ,Brad Pitt, Gerard Way"Since i had neither of this ,i gave up trying .Hopelessy wasting my resources was one thing.Approving this resources to be spent on them was plain stupidity.Pak-torlogy would be a subject i would fail anyway, if it was implemented in school.
"Yo Nicky, the amps ready, When do you want them turned on?' Danny called out above the momental humming as he plugged his Les Paul Jr into the amp
"Fuck it, wait a lil' while yea?" i was annoyed, yet half annoyed, half in ecstasy.
"Yo Nicky,we aint got all day, besides that lil punk sarah is inviting us again to her house."Jake cut in
"Fuck, im out of this invite i hate girls anyway" i cleared my throat in a sarcastic manner
"Awright, turn the fucking amps on and wait for my signal"Glee was overtaking.Hysteria was one thing more that i could handle
"Im not okay take 1"
The world was going into overdrive as the drum beats and shrill music notes mixed, shattering the cacophony of the peace seconds ago
"Well if you wanted honesty,thats alllllllllllllllll you had to say................." i screamed into the mike
"Fucking awesome amps that was! Jake counted out , rubbing his ears painfully.
"Aww darn, Sarah is calling again" Danny grimanced as he answered the call with much a pained expression
"Well fuck her, lets play into the handphone" Jake called out
With a cheeky expression Danny put the phone near the amp.
"As the firey red sunball subsided into the marshy clouds, i walked to the garage, with nothing but a mirror as company
Glancing at the guys, i bade the chumps goodbye as they peeled out in thier GT-R.
"Fucking nite without a fucking date, i screamed.I threw the pocket mirror i had after i viewed my own facial features, which were gross.
I could only gasp in surprise as a girl around my age walked into the driveway