Callan:
erm...can i make some comments? i'm quite a regular writer and i do poetry...maybe i should post some of my doodle here and get some comments too. So anyway, I think your poems can do with a bit more imagery and play with words. I liked the acroustics alot though.

Keep writing!
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Destination ------(c) Herself
The flower blooms only to wither
and the children play only to grow
The adults love only to hate
and the babies are born to winters
You enjoy the spring and summers gone,
Only to endure the whiteness of winter lawns.
Closing your eyes to shun the tears
Only to smile when your heart tears (
as in rip--tear)The wait for an end,
and longing to begin,
Endless circle of black.
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Fire (c) Herself
You're a match for me---
You're a match trapped in a body of flesh.
Flames may lick your soul, desperate at being held hostage
But your skin is inflammable.
I'm not sure what I want,
I'm not sure I know you;
I'm not sure if I am who I am
Or what you want me to be,
But I know what I don't want----
I don't want you.
I always said love for the adrenaline in your blood,
the giddiness to your head and
the bursting sensation in your heart,
But I don't want to hurt you----
Not you with the crystal heart.
I don't want to lead you on,
But I don't want to leave you alone;
I don't want to fall to the ground,
cos to get up is to haul up my too heavy 121 pounds.