tell me how u find this ..
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http://blue_kelvinsg.tripod.com/kevin_-_mesmerized.mp3
i know its a crap song. but tell me how u find it ?
Mesmerized
She's more than a friend to me
She has this really sweet sweet smile
And the sparkle in her eyes
Glows the room alight
She's the jovial but cheeky kind
I'm amazed time after time
Such a lovely sweetiepie
Oops I just told a lie !
She loves to act cute all the time
It makes people wonder why
But there'll never be goodbyes
Friends forever in our lives
She's like a little angel learning to fly
No one else but her, resides in my mind
Feels different each time she laughs
My heart melts when she's around
Cus maybe it's the way she talks
Or the way she smiles
Or for the girl she is
That had me mesmerized .. -
hey..not bad..here's the breakdown.
Melody: excellent! i think asian composers of slow nice mellow music are the best in the world. haha...really the melody's good. might wanna look into the arrangement of it to bring it out. otherwise, you've got the right tune.
Voice: Great potential. Not quite there yet but its def a nice voice to listen to. the singer tends to drag or fumble his words when it comes to the 'L's and the 'R's. but its and asian thing to do so dun worry. a lil practice would help. for eg. your "act cute all the time" sounds real awful..."she's like a little..." sounds like "sheslikealirrle" basically your "little"s all sound like "lirrle" the "girl"s also sound like "gurr"s... the ang moh's have it easier cause their pronounciation is spot on and more distinct. dun worry though. practice would eradicate it.
Lyrics: absolutely disastrous. if you're singing for a jc concert or some school play then its ok. but if you're thinking of releasing this as a single i suggest you work on the lyrics. some parts are good but "act cute" "She's the jovial but cheeky kind " "sweetiepie" "really sweet sweet smile" they just dun belong in an english song. I hate to say it but english songs should be atleast a A2 type of standard when it comes to songs. the lyrics dun have to include bombastic words but they must clique and at least retain a sense of proper english. Act cute is def not an english term.
However. there are nice parts of the song esp the last verse?
"She's like a little angel learning to fly
No one else but her, resides in my mind
Feels different each time she laughs
My heart melts when she's around
Cus maybe it's the way she talks
Or the way she smiles
Or for the girl she is
That had me mesmerized "
the mesmerized part is v nice!
Overall: the song is pretty alright. def not a chart topper and would struggle to break into the top 20. if it was longer and had more "bridges" it would be better. Definitely looking forward to more improvements from this artists/composer/musician!! Good Luck to him!! -
Originally posted by Farmer Brown:
actually i wrote and sang it. haa.. wrote it for a friend.. so i try to be crappie in my lyrics. wahaha...
hey..not bad..here's the breakdown.
Melody: excellent! i think asian composers of slow nice mellow music are the best in the world. haha...really the melody's good. might wanna look into the arrangement of it to bring it out. otherwise, you've got the right tune.
Voice: Great potential. Not quite there yet but its def a nice voice to listen to. the singer tends to drag or fumble his words when it comes to the 'L's and the 'R's. but its and asian thing to do so dun worry. a lil practice would help. for eg. your "act cute all the time" sounds real awful..."she's like a little..." sounds like "sheslikealirrle" basically your "little"s all sound like "lirrle" the "girl"s also sound like "gurr"s... the ang moh's have it easier cause their pronounciation is spot on and more distinct. dun worry though. practice would eradicate it.
Lyrics: absolutely disastrous. if you're singing for a jc concert or some school play then its ok. but if you're thinking of releasing this as a single i suggest you work on the lyrics. some parts are good but "act cute" "She's the jovial but cheeky kind " "sweetiepie" "really [b]sweet sweet smile" they just dun belong in an english song. I hate to say it but english songs should be atleast a A2 type of standard when it comes to songs. the lyrics dun have include bombastic words but they must clique and at least retain a sense of proper english. Act cute is def not an english term.
However. there are nice parts of the song esp the last verse?
"She's like a little angel learning to fly
No one else but her, resides in my mind
Feels different each time she laughs
My heart melts when she's around
Cus maybe it's the way she talks
Or the way she smiles
Or for the girl she is
That had me mesmerized "
the mesmerized part is v nice!
Overall: the song is pretty alright. def not a chart topper and would struggle to break into the top 20. if it was longer and had more "bridges" it would be better. Definitely looking forward to more improvements from this artists/composer/musician!! Good Luck to him!![/b] -
ps : my friend likes to act cute. haha
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well... i think if u wanna charm her (which i can tell u actually do..) then she's not gonna be impressed...well not as impressed as she actually will be if u write a proper song...serious!
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i actually find it rather nice, although the file came up to be quite jerky.. i like the melody n u have a nice voice... good enough to charm the gal u wan anyway
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u the guy who joined in the tq competition??
saw u play and sing that day at bugis...
not bad... but can't hear ur guitar lor... such a waste.... -
Nice song... Hey! U've got a nice voice..!
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yups. you came to watch ? *haA well, anyway i doubt i can qualify to enter the finals even my guitar was blasting. ha! the contestants were really powerful sia !Originally posted by coolger03:u the guy who joined in the tq competition??
saw u play and sing that day at bugis...
not bad... but can't hear ur guitar lor... such a waste....
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so u were there..I also there to listen contestants sing..I wanted to join but too bad too late for registration..Originally posted by blue_kelvinsg:yups. you came to watch ? *haA well, anyway i doubt i can qualify to enter the finals even my guitar was blasting. ha! the contestants were really powerful sia ! 
...One of the female contestant sing 'to love you more' wah biang i found it superb.. -
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u have to right click at the link, then select save target asOriginally posted by karaokeaddict:cannot listen
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nice song. Can give me the chords?
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r u in the final?? for solo or composing one??Originally posted by blue_kelvinsg:yups. you came to watch ? *haA well, anyway i doubt i can qualify to enter the finals even my guitar was blasting. ha! the contestants were really powerful sia !
u not bad leh... can sing, play guitar and compose...
me that day actually went to watch my fren one... and he got into the finals! hehehe -
Originally posted by blue_kelvinsg:
wow...U got a nice voice(sound like my fren)haha..Anyway..When u gg ktv..Call me along..Duo duo xue xi..U use wat to record into mp3?
u have to [b]right click at the link, then select save target as[/b] -
ur fren who?sing wat song?dun tell me jacky cheung song..The let me go or xin shui liao wu hen?Originally posted by coolger03:r u in the final?? for solo or composing one??
u not bad leh... can sing, play guitar and compose...
me that day actually went to watch my fren one... and he got into the finals! hehehe -
finals for composing. didnt get in for solo. *ha! me not so powerOriginally posted by coolger03:r u in the final?? for solo or composing one??
u not bad leh... can sing, play guitar and compose...
me that day actually went to watch my fren one... and he got into the finals! hehehe
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nvm..At least u manage to get a chance to stand on stage...Originally posted by blue_kelvinsg:finals for composing. didnt get in for solo. *ha! me not so power -
okies. good things must share. heheOriginally posted by Broken Rubber:nice song. Can give me the chords?
http://blue_kelvinsg.tripod.com/Mesmerized.txt -
neither.. he sang eason's yu gan one...Originally posted by karaokeaddict:ur fren who?sing wat song?dun tell me jacky cheung song..The let me go or xin shui liao wu hen?
hehehehe.... got nice voice... -
yah lor... can get into semi finals already quite good liao leh....Originally posted by karaokeaddict:nvm..At least u manage to get a chance to stand on stage...
think will get to hear ur composition lor... hehehe.. me got the tix to the finals liao.... -
where u get the tix?Originally posted by coolger03:yah lor... can get into semi finals already quite good liao leh....
think will get to hear ur composition lor... hehehe.. me got the tix to the finals liao.... -
here ..Originally posted by skyline_05:where u get the tix?
http://www.sistic.com.sg/SOPApp/SOPPortal/portal_proxy?uri=X.=2G!wX5vCFus_zKPyYGP,-BY6L6.xVJqaAgsJFM -
oh i used sound forge to record it. haha. downloaded it from kazaaOriginally posted by karaokeaddict:wow...U got a nice voice(sound like my fren)haha..Anyway..When u gg ktv..Call me along..Duo duo xue xi..U use wat to record into mp3?