10 minutes.... (story)
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The sea breeze was blowing gently against my face. "Woah, thats such a nice feeling" I thought to myself. Time flies. One year had passed since "That incident" happened. "Why? Why did I do that?" But I could only live with the regret for as long as I breathe.
As I walk along the beach, all those memories came back. It The familiar voice, laughter, cries and feeling all came back. I do not want the feelings to come back! I only want her to come back!!! But it would not happen. Its getting late, I gotta go home or my mum will start nagging at me.
I reach home at 11pm. True enough, my mum was waiting for me at the door. But I sense something is wrong. She did not shout at me, she did not yell at me. Something is really wrong here. As I walk towards her...
Time up. Please wait til the next episode of "10 minute short story" ny ratty81
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??? Ur story got 10 mins meh, took me less than 1min to finish leh...
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10 mins to write
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paiseh ah nothing to do so write tis story my 1st try hehe.
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haha jus write watever tat comes to my mindOriginally posted by Xiao Jun:10 mins to write -
fwah u write story ar?
i bookmark this. -
& you're just able to come up with 10 mins?Originally posted by RaTtY8l:haha jus write watever tat comes to my mind -
Ok, gd try but there's still room for improvement thoughOriginally posted by RaTtY8l:paiseh ah nothing to do so write tis story my 1st try hehe.
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thank youOriginally posted by browniebaobao:fwah u write story ar?
i bookmark this. 
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Originally posted by Xiao Jun:& you're just able to come up with 10 mins?
hope its not too boring -
wat needs to b improve, tell me lehOriginally posted by SMRT Buses:Ok, gd try but there's still room for improvement though 
. so my story will b more interesting -
Amusing is e word~Originally posted by RaTtY8l: hope its not too boring -
Nt bad nt bad
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funny meh? which part amusing?Originally posted by Xiao Jun:Amusing is e word~ -
All 10 mins of it!Originally posted by RaTtY8l:funny meh? which part amusing? -
Part 2...
Mum was crying!!! I run to her and ask what happen? "Your ddaaadddd. Hhhee isss in hhosppittall!!" "He deserved it!!" That is the 1st thought that came to my mind. Ever since I was borned, he never took care of me.
When I was younger, my mum would pay off all the loan sharks loan that he had incurred. What the Fark father was he?? He slept at the garden hiding from the loan sharks while my mum n bro was shaking in fear, afraid that the loan sharks might set our house on fire. Once the loan sharks wrote O $ P $ with my block no. and unit no. My frens asked me what was that. I really felt angry and ashamed. I than joking said that was a prank by my other friends.
There was 1 time which really made me hated him. He stole my mum's bangle and pawned it!!! That was really the last straw. And guess what did he do with the money? He went Batam for a "holiday". My mum was throughly disappointed and I could sense her heart broke. When he came back, my mum threw out all his belonging out of our house and chased him away. He then beg for forgive. Mum should not have forgave him.
"Police called and said he was knock down just now and call me to go to hospital." Mum cried while saying this to me.... -
Part 3...
I hated him to the core. I sweared that I would not attend his funeral even if he is dead. But not wanting to make my mum even more sad. I accompany her to the hospital.
We asked around in the hospital for where is my dad. A doctor attend us and told mum that dad's in a critical condition. He has got multiple broken ribs and it seems like his lungs is punctured. Mum than proceed to see dad. After seeing the condition of dad, my heart began to soften. Although i hated him alot but we still have the same blood flowing in our body.
"Mum lets go home n rest. Tomorrow I will accompany you to see dad again." Mum initially refused but agreed after the doc also advise her to return home. "Do not tell ur bro about this. I do not want him to worry and distract his study." "But but.......ok", I replied.
That night, i could not sleep. Thoughts raced through my mind. I was confused. Initially I hated him but now......
To b continued. pls support n give comment whether its boring anot. -
shouldnt all be in past tense?
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paiseh my grammer not good lol.Originally posted by MrDeeJay:shouldnt all be in past tense? -
Good job raty !
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thank youOriginally posted by rathcycle:Good job raty ! -
go do your corrections.Originally posted by RaTtY8l:paiseh my grammer not good lol. -
aiya dun need correct la. wait do correcttion liao become more wrongOriginally posted by MrDeeJay:go do your corrections. -
Haahaa.Originally posted by RaTtY8l:aiya dun need correct la. wait do correcttion liao become more wrong
Ya, we all understand can liao..
Not bad, somemore leh... -
more!
hope its not anti climax ending hor